Illithid

Illithid

Before my time she came
The naïve soul to claim
Her every thought, her every feat
Her every word filled with deceit
Honey dripping from her tongue
Her breath is putrid Illithid dung
With ancient guile she does ensnare
The innocent victim unaware
The depths of evil she has plumbed
The countless ones who have succumbed
Arrogant is the one alone
Seated on her fiery throne.
She will never bow the knee
To love, to truth, to integrity.
She cannot, will not, comprehend
The broken heart that God can mend
But do not pity this ancient one
She chooses the ancient fiery throne.
She craves the power that hell doth bring
Though it is a fleeting thing
Turn from her and then ascend
And do not plumb the depths again
For she is clever; she will ensnare
The curious one who is unaware.
Leave her perched on her ephemeral throne
Amidst the dancing flames, alone.

 

Excellent!

 

Amazing!!! BRAVO!

 

Excellent piece Yaya!

 

Wow! Nice compliment coming from you, my Yaya sister.
I like your new signature phrase. Words to live by.

Thanks to all of you for reading this cautionary tale.

 

Well written, but I can't help wondering who/what are we being cautioned about?

 

The Illithid is a mind-flaying creature of Dungeons and Dragons fame.

In my poem, I thought Illithid was the perfect depiction of paralyzing fear, that controls the mind, imprisoning it in a self-made hell.

Fear will always be there; but we don’t have to allow it to control us. We can rise above it; and leave it to rule over the empty depths alone.

 

I knew that.

 

Thanks for the explanation. You wrote it so you would know what you intended.
It made more sense to me when I thought of "she" as a person rather than fear.

It is a very well crafted poem, Prima Donna.

 

So my explanation isn't plausible, huh Rosie? Sounds like I pulled that one out of my ass?
Well good. I'm glad you could see through that lame explanation, because it detracts from
the power of the poem's original intent.

Illithid does make more sense when it refers to a specific person.

 

I didn't say any of that, Prima Donna. I merely said what made sense to me. often people will interpret a poem differently.

I don't understand your hostility toward me. Oh well.

Rose

 

no,

Oh I can easily see how you would think that I'm being hostile to you, but not at all. I should have chosen my words more carefully. Read my words again, with the understanding that I am acknowledging that you are right in your observation about the poem. Illithid is a poem about a specific horrible manipulative, deceitful person. Her behavior does have an impact on people much like the mind-flaying Illithid. I just wanted to write the poem; cathartic and all, and hoped others would feel that sense of catharsis in relation to the "Illithid" in their lives. I assumed they'd understand and not need to probe further; as I choose not to identify the Illithid of which I write.

I should have been honest about the poem's meaning, though. My apologies, FadedRose.

Good observation. I mean that sincerely. I'm not being hostile.

 

I probed further because this is a public message board and you mentioned that this was a cautionary tale. That made me start to think that there was more to your poem than bringing out catharsis in our lives.

Given the recent poem wars here in the Writers' Den it's not rocket surgery.

Rose

 

Illithid is a wonderful character!

Amazing piece of poetry! Thanx for sharing it with us.

 

Wow I need to get over here more often. Good writings my dear Prima!!! I actually,believe it or not know someone with these exact same -self qualities. Scary this person thinks that world is normal. Sometimes though I have to remember God made us all different and I do THank Him for that daily. Some people have no hope and want no help thinking spreading pain and hurt and is self satisfying for them. It's really sad when you think about it.

 

Powerful - how did I miss this before? The imagery is so real - makes me get the bad goose bumps - but good writing.

I will have to re - read later and comment again. So many mental pictures and words to digest that I need time to reflect.

 

I must admit that not knowing the dungens and dragons game except for the name I kinda thought it was about an individual not a being. It is very well written and now that I've read it more than once, I see the connection to the imaginairy (plus I looked up Illithid )

 

I've sais this before, " someone, sometimes,mis anexcellant writer.

Keep writing!